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| Hello Blimprider  This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum"  [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   Great story! I'm not a gamer and I truly enjoyed it. I can only imagine gamers would love it! It's extremely well written. The descriptions enable the reader to be right there with the characters. Nice job. Title and Description - Great title and description. The title will bring in a flux of those who write code or work in the business, while your description will bring in those of us who aren't as knowledgeable. Theme/Subject Matter:- A guy who writes code for the gaming industry meets up with someone who helps him develop the next big thing! Is she too good to be true? Characters - Your characters are well developed and well rounded. The reader easily gets to know them as the story progresses. Originality/Creativity:- A highly creative and original story. I haven't read another quite like it.  Setting - The author uses his talent to describe the surroundings quite nicely. He does an amazing job of also describing what is happening in the game. Which is needed, as the game is central to the story. The reader is easily put into the story and is easily able to visualize each scene. Emotion/Impact: - Why do the good guys always seem to get it in the end? Of course, I was hoping that he would end up coming out on top. The ending allows the reader to come up with what happens next. Although, the story hints at exactly what happens. My Suggestions - I only have a few minor suggestions. eventually, the stamina  blacked out, and  body builder bodybuilder from her face, character, No comma is needed.  opponent,"That's fair," she said, No comma is needed.  My Favorite Part: - I like the surprise ending. Though, I wish it didn't happen.   Summary: I truly enjoyed your story. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/22/2023 @ 11:15am EDT