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 Dark Igneous' Sea Adventure  [E]
This is how Dark Igneous came around to where she was when she was still inside an egg.
by Angelica- Happy Mothers Day!
Review by Beholden
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I think this is a very clever piece of work. It is very short and intended only as an introduction to a much larger work, but in these few words you have established much of the basic world that the story is to be set in. And you have done this without resorting to a huge info dump that reads more like an encyclopedia entry than a story. No, you have conveyed the information within a little story of its own, an egg being transported by rushing water to another place where it can await rebirth.

What have we learned? That the occupant of the egg is a dragon and that a dragon needs a rider before it can be born beyond the egg. That this is a process that may take many years or even ages. Nowhere is this stated as a sort of biology lesson on dragons - you feed the reader little details and it's the reader who has to put them together to understand how it works. So much more fun and allowing the reader a sense of accomplishment and participation in the writing. It's the essence of good writing.

I am not sure where the Comedy mentioned as a genre comes in. Maybe I missed something but I didn't see anything to laugh at in the piece - it was all too delightful for that. Dark also looked a bit of a stretch to me. It might be better if you were to choose a different pair of genres that bear a little more relation to the piece - Mythology and Animal would be suitable, I think.

It's a minor point but sometimes it can be the silliest things that put a reader off reading at all. Best not to risk it!

Certainly the piece functions as an excellent introduction to the larger that is to follow. A quite magical piece of work that is a very enjoyable read.

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