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 Pickleball  [E]
You'll really like this game
by Norman
Review of Pickleball  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Norman .

I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Pickleball"  for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~"  group. *Smile*

*Puzzle4* Form. You present an eight-stanza poem with a rhyming pattern of a-b-c-b. For the most part it reads really well. I noted a couple suggestions below.

*Note1* Overall Impression. As for your subject--while I've heard of Pickleball, I've never really watched it. I was surprised to read about the potential speed of play. There really are different strokes for different folks. *Wink*

I love your ending. A great pun just has to be appreciated.

*Exclaim* Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem.

         *Bullet* Your meter seems off to me as a reader. Perhaps:  When you first get a look at them

         *Bullet* Again, I think your meter reads better by deleting 'up.'  If you don’t stay up on your toes

*Thumbsup* Favorite Part.   Your ending.

*Star* Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions.


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JACE

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