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 Jaelynn  [E]
Poem about my granddaughter
by andrea1966
Review of Jaelynn  
Review by Monty
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A very nice write. I would have broke it into three stanza and where you have the double Wants, I would have said And to make you all pretty with ribbons and bows. If you find Your way to shorten that long line "I look forward to guiding you as you choose your lifelong path". It would help the rhythm. The rhyme and imagery is perfect.
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