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Worm Moon

[13+]
Writer's Cramp - 4-25 Contest
by J.R. PETE

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Review of Worm Moon

Review by Lornda

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Rated: 13+

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Hello, J.R. PETE

I'm checking out the genre of Mystery today, and your item came up in my search! I see this was written for a the Writer's Cramp contest. You did well in weaving all the prompt words throughout to come up with an interesting story. The only thing I would suggest is to update your description to draw in more readers and include the Writer's Cramp link within the item.

I thought that this was an interesting concept. It starts out in the past to explain what they found, and then fast forwards to the present. For me, it started and stopped the flow by have two different scenes. I think having the whole story in the present would help ground the story and keep it to one or two characters. As for the part at the beginning, a little of that history can be brought in when they finally figure out where the necklace came from. I think it could've been expanded a bit but I know there's a restriction on the word count.

Overall, I think it's a neat story! I think because of the topic, it would benefit the story by having more details. I enjoyed the description of the quartz necklace--it sounded so beautiful. It's one of those stories that has more to 'tell' us, so maybe one day you can expand on it! Keep up the great work!