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 Then and Now  [E]
A woman (me) reflects on her life ... past and present ... then and now.
by MJones
Review of Then and Now  
Review by Lornda
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, MJones


*Sun* I found your poem with the 'Read & Review' feature! I enjoyed reading it, and I thought the title and description fit the poem perfectly. I don't write a lot of poetry, but I can imagine to write a whole life story into it must be a hard thing to do. I liked how it was structured, and how it slowly went through the painful experience as a child right down to today. Well done!

*Sun* I don't have a lot of feedback, but I did have to pause here and there because sometimes the verses melded together like one long sentence. I think it's because of having no capital letters to start each stanza. Other than that, I thought the rhyming moved it along at a good pace, and it didn't seemed forced.

*Sun* Overall, a beautiful poem, which describes not the best time in one's life, but it's full of emotion, and I could certainly feel that as I read a long. In the 'Then' part of the poem, I really liked how you bolded the 'I' for emphasis. The word choice was excellent to get us to feel the emotion. I felt it the strongest at the end section here: I’ll open the door.... From here, the emotion got even stronger to describe the pain even as an adult, and the last line is perfect! Keep up the great work. *Stary*

*Swords* Lornda




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