Hello Scarypotato-doing bettertoday

I found your short story on the plug page looking for an item to review for JACE - House Targaryen 's Newsfeed challenge!

Here are my thoughts on your Story -

Title

The title of "The Light" does not give a lot away about the nature of the story, it is a short and sweet title but I like those. It made me think of something supernatural .

Plot

The plot is straightforward to understand, and follows a common theme of a person being abducted by aliens. It is probably a plot which is a bit overdone however the writing style here makes the story stand out a bit more.

Characters

The story is written in the (second?!) person meaning the main character in a way is the reader! I have not read many stories like this and I thought this was interesting and entertaining to read.

Writing style

The story is written in short, sharp, bursting, sentences which gives it a sense of urgency and suspense, this encouraged me to carry on reading. I was engaged in the story and it was easy to read and understand.

Favourite Bits

I liked the bit about the person trying to attack the aliens with the oar of the canoe!

Suggestions

The ending does not quite seem to wrap up the story with the line "Something's not right" - I would leave out these three words and end it there.

"Careful not to loose your oar" - Probably a typo but "Lose" not "loose"

This might make a good start to an interactive story?!

Conclusion

Storyline is a bit of a cliche but I liked the style it was written in and the descriptions









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .