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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation

A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Title: Promises

Hi Huntersmoon: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: This is a poem about love and I am a hopeless romantic. I decided to give this a shot. I read the opening lines. First kiss, fulfillment, heart's promise. I wanted to read more so I gave it a looksie and read it. I will share my observations with you. Hang on.

What needs your attention: I think this poem could us two more stanzas. How long did the man know her before this moment of the kiss? Had she been true to him all along or were they just dating as friends?? Tell about his intentions of how the romance will play out. A rhyme pattern could balance this out. Structured, free verse is always nice as well.

What part I liked best: The first kiss. The kiss didn't disappoint him or her it seems. In passion, love is usually found. He thinks love is impossible but looks like at the end of the poem, he has changed his mind. I like anything about love.

Overall Impression: A good style. Creative and colorful. Easy to follow. This draws the reader in. Lovely reflections. Creative and enlightening. I smiled as I read this. Promises. At least we have them.

The views and opinions are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore do not reflect necessarily to the activity, group, and/ or event being affiliated within. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Thank you for letting me read your work. It has been my pleasure.