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Fire to Ashes  [13+]
A dark to light story
by Joy
Review of Fire to Ashes  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Joy! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .

*Reading* Hmmm. This is a poignant, supernatural story. A story that comes close to what many young men are told and believe. This young man received a second chance. When he awakened from his sure death, he was glad to find himself alive.

The promises he was told did not happen. Where was his nirvana when he crossed over? Where were all of the things he was promised? Instead of feeling like he was walking on thick moss, he found himself falling down, further and further.

There was nothing but darkness.

The relationship between the two characters is strong. The reader can see how much the main character relied on the woman, who walked away, leaving him with questions that would go unanswered.

The scenery and actions are vivid, and enable the reader to envision each scene as the story moves along.

I like the ending when he makes a promise that everyone will know the truth, that the promises are just lies. Don't die for them.

Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit,

*Books4* if it was the enemy,

if it were the enemy,

*Penr* but still he heaped

Comma needed after still

*Notepady* shining of iridescent

shining with iridescent

*Pencil* wild fires

wildfires


Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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