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Whisper Softly, My Love  [18+]
An intimate encounter
by Shannon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hallo!

This is an evocative piece of writing. You describe the encounter with passion and feeling. My favourite is the last line.

While the piece is complete as it is, since you end it with 'nothing but you', I think maybe I'd have liked a bit more description of the background to start with, and then as the encounter progresses, less and less of other things till everything else has melted away.

Thanks for sharing this!
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- Sonali

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