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 | Upstaged  [E] A story of an illusionist being upstaged by her assistant.  |
| (5.0)| Hi GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen  This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked: The list is a long one!  Firstly, I love the partnership of Irene and Daphnie. The way their dynamic changes, and although Irene isn't happy about that, they adapt and grow into their new selves. This is true of Daphnie as well as Irene. Yes; Irene has to accept that Daphnie will attract as much attention as her. But Daphnie has to allow that to happen. She is naturally shy, and it can't be easy for her to accept such attention. But they do. They both change, and they both grow. I really like that. I loved how surprised I was when the the sapphire sparks appeared in the latch of the case. I couldn't wait to read more and find out what was happening, and why. I didn't get it until some way into the story. I didn't get that Daphnie truly possessed magical powers. Until Irene acknowledged this. I thought maybe the box was magical. But, anyway, I loved the surprise I felt at the magic and at Daphnie. There were lots of words and phrases that stood out to me as fantastic. These are just a few of them: "a raw, dissonant energy." This is describing the audience's reaction to Daphnie's magic. "Sapphire sparks danced off the brass latch ..." This is a very visual description, and I love it. "the audience's collective focus was a spotlight far stronger than the ones she commanded." This, too, makes me smile when I read it. " ...a torrent of color and energy ..." - This is probably my favourite. It's so imaginative, a really unique way of describing this.Suggestions: I am being super picky now because I think the story is wonderful as it is, so it is hard to find anything for change. However, I did struggle to understand this: "Magic is order." Irene says this to try to make Daphnie control her magic, but I wasn't sure what it means. Parting comments: This is a great story, Gervic. I enjoyed reading it a lot, and I am in awe of your power to use imagery in prose form. Love it. Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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