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Review #4743949
Viewing a review of:
Those Who Live in Grass Houses  [18+]
All the GoT stuff, 2024.
by Beholden
         Review for entry/chapter: "Car" 
Review by Lornda
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello, Beholden !


*Sun* I decided to randomly choose one of your Northern entries to review! What an awesome story for the prompt. As soon as the story started, I was hooked from the beginning to the end. The prompt stipulates that it as to be a story 'in a car', and when I read the prompt first, I didn't even think of this aspect for a story. Well done!

*Sun* While reading, I found it so smooth with a fast pace. I was also at the edge of my seat wondering what was going to happen next. For this to happen to a reader, the word choice has to be spot on and paint a clear picture. I had no problem visualizing what exactly was going on, and the wording was perfect. I found it all believable, and the descriptions were not overdone.

*Sun* I think you captured the whole scene with not only what was happening in the car, but you also included what can go through a person's mind with random thoughts when an horrific situation is happening. I enjoyed everything about the story, and I have many parts that are my favorite, but the best for me is that opening paragraph especially, how you described the phrasing of what a frozen moment was like--beautifully written and almost poetic. The ending slowly built-up and of course, the reader knows what's coming, but the way it's detailed and how the reading slowed just enough for the final impact was done well. Way to go!

*Swords* Lornda


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