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 SHARING  [E]
Friendship between two first-graders- for Writer's Cramp
by Joy
Review of SHARING  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Storyline: Amanda is good at spelling, and Francine envies that ability. Francine is better at coloring without going outside the lines and Amanda praises her for that. The two girls are friendly. Amanda learns that Francine doesn't have a mother when the girls discuss the tooth fairy. They discuss important things like the tooth fairy, Santa Claus, and schoolwork.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: Amanda drags Francine to look at the fish, but the boys don't want the girls there. This is where the personalities of the girls shine. Amanda is bolder and doesn't take crap from anyone. Francine is more subdued and stays away from conflict. When the girls go to the books, the boys follow intending to dump water on them. Francine finds the inner strength to stick up for herself and Amanda.

Overall Impression: Sometimes you forget how innocent and forgiving young children are. They see right through the crap and get right to the heart of the matter. You showed that well. Good dynamics of second graders and how they interact with one another, especially the boys not liking girls and trying to tease the girls because they didn't like Amanda threatening to kiss them if they didn't let the girls near the fish. I loved that Amanda tells Francine they can share her mother. Very sweet.




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