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 My Rainbow Bunny  [E]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm
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Title: My Rainbow Bunny

Hi: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: I like bunnies and I wrote a poem for this prompt. I was anxious to read your take on this. After the last snow fell, a rainbow emerged. A cute way to start a poem. Mother nature had her sense of humor. Father nature didn't know what to think. So, I had to read more and I am here to give a review and my observations.

What needs your attention: The poor little bunny sliding on glass after slipping on a stone. Did he get hurt? I just wonder why there was a rainbow after the snow?

Part I liked best: A rainbow emerged. The bunny had floppy, striped ears. This is colorful and flowers bloomed. I like the different types used. This adds contrast.

Overall Impression: A neat rhyme pattern puts the words in motion and rounds this out with a good flair. The words blend well together. A good style with some action. This holds the reader's attention. Looks like you put some thought into this. A good presentation. I was hoping the bunny got a happy ending. This poem has nice descriptions of the weather. I enjoyed reading this.

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