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...And Now We're Out of Carrots  [E]
Politics feels like a mule chasing a carrot, that is always out of reach. Now, no carrots.
by Jay O'Toole
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: ... And now we're out of carrots

First Impression: I find the title humorous. Especially when it comes to dealing with politics. Running out of carrots is a serious missing ingredient though. The speaker is encouraged to vote by dad. One vote to stand by. A candidate was there who gave the speaker hope. Voting time came and the speaker did vote. And the speaker ran out of carrots it seems November 2016. The carrots are no more today. But it will not dissuade this son.

I smiled reading this poem. There is humor in it which I like about it. Great details. Voting is important. All citizens must vote. The speaker stands by these words. The downfall of the voting season is that the speaker ran out of carrots and until today has no carrots. I found this funny and sad at the same time. Carrots are good for your eyes and just all of a sudden run out and not have anymore for the rest of the speaker's life? That's a tragedy to bear. Still, the speaker is intent to vote and I encourage to do that as well. It's important to have your voice heard and it matters in the election whether or not one vote seem to make a difference.

What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: The focus and encouragement to vote even though it sounded like daddy required it. Reading about being out of carrots was funny too.

Overall impression: Great work with the subject of politics without leaning onto any one side of the spectrum. The focus of voting is important even despite a catastrophe happen like running out of carrots. There are few ways to take this poem and I believe the importance of voting is emphasized. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

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