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 Clandestine Services  [ASR]
Let's get out of here! Daily Flash Fiction Challenge entry.
by Jeff
Review by Annette
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Jeff

First impression:

Clandestine Services that someone wants to get out of with an exclamation mark! This ought to be full of action.

What works:

Aw. That must be one beloved CEO to warrant this kind of Black Ops deployment. Both of the characters were a fun to watch. Although their calling and yelling back worried me that they were sure to attract the security guards, I felt that if they thought it was safe to be this loud in the middle of the night in that building, they knew what they were doing.

It was an interesting bit of information that the narrator in this story seemed to have done things like this in the past and the partner in "crime" was a newbie at this.

What needs work:

Just for the fun on it, this could use a thumbnail image. The StoryMistress has made hundreds available. They do make each item more colorful and give some context.

Final thoughts:

Surprises, as long as they are good and positive, are always a good way to celebrate things. We threw our middle son a surprise party with 20+ of his high school friends when he turned 18. Husband got in touch with one of the male students and asked him to call on anyone who was in frequent contact with our son. (Husband did not think that calling a bunch of teen girls was good form. And he was right.) That way, the surprise was complete. Even we didn't know exactly how many would show up. Super successful party! Thank you for the memories.

I hope that this CEO knows what kind of a fun crew he presides over.

Annette
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