ONE DAY IN 5TH PERIOD [E] A student in my 8th grade remedial english class wrote his first poem ever. |
Hello! I found your poem at random. I'm writing this for: "Game of Thrones" and I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful. I am the watcher on the walls. I am the shield that guards the realms of men. I pledge my life and honor to the Night's Watch, for this night and all the nights to come. My impression of this piece: Being a 5th grader that kid was, he did a good poem for a girl he liked. and I think that's cute that way he wrote it. I've never had a boy write a poem like that but I did had crushes while growing up. I could relate to the poem. Grammar and Spelling: None What I really liked: This part I liked because he had to get enough courage to go up to a girl, who he liked and let her know how he felt. according to what I was reading, he was struggling with his own emotions about the girl. I'm sure he was really shy but he did it and he told her. I hope years later he remembers what he wrote. When I got to her desk She flipped her hair back and said, “Hi” And then I poured out my feelings Suggestions: Well, there is two things, you have to make the font at size 4 and center the poem, so people can see it and read it. I like the poem and I hope you get more readers to your port. Final Thoughts / Side Notes: My thoughts on this is, you have a good poem from the boy, you may have known in school. The poem really made my day, when I read it. What I'm wondering now, what happened to the boy who wrote the poem? I'm glad you posted this poem and it was a good one, I think. I'm sure, the boy had a crush on the girl and I hope they are friends still. I appreciate reading the poem Thank you for sharing, Beacon Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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