Hello to anyone reading this. I want to thank you for checking into my portfolio. I remember around 1998, while I was still in middle school, coming up with one character, and eventually came the universe into which he lived. The first draft of that universe was only around twenty pages, but now this first in a series is ten times that size. I would like you to give me honest criticism on what you think of my novel preview, which I hope is good enough to be published. Thank you