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Oh wow! This is such a sweet romantic tale! I like the magical elements and the arrival of the wise man, a saviour type of being, appropriate for the Christmas spirit. Your response to the prompt was so unique and I like how you leave Bear's name til the end so we get the idea of who he becomes. 
I was engaged in the story from the first with your clear description of Bear and his ailment. The two main characters are well shown through description and dialogue. Your conversations were lively and revealed the story line and feelings of the characters. I had to read to the end! 
The plot was clear and the solution to the problem was mystical. 
It is interesting how you use short indicators in the dialogue like: "Sternly", .
I thought this line could flow better if you take out the word "were". That way it is one sentence.
I wondered who the Mistress was and what became of her. Though that is for another segway! 
Thanks for sharing your craft and imagination.
Happy WDC Anniversary Carly! I am here with a review to celebrate you as part of the fun at "
The symbol of "soup" is well conceived here and the word "discrimination" adds to the meaning. Wow! Powerful verse that bears pondering deeply.
I enjoyed the unique vision and evocative nature of the poem. Thanks for sharing your gift.
The reaction of the listener is clear and I could easily imagine the scene. I enjoyed the word choice where you use repeated letters and some alliteration. The idea that the feelings that you list "wrap" around him. It gives them a power. Good use of personifying.
The ending is abrupt and one can feel the relief of the listener. And I am left to ponder if he has just let go of emotional baggage or... is it a kind of death. Cool! the idea of healing with sound is so right on!! I wanted to know what happens next. 
I liked the variety of foods you would have for your feast. The picture is appealing. It was fun to read and it is cool how you added some rhyme to assist the flow. Adding words like Yum, My oh My shows the emotion about the food, which is an element of the form. Maybe add a comma after "cabbage". 
Wow! This is a moving tribute to a loved one. The sad tone is evocative as you take us on a journey dealing with grief. You have captured the season of spring brilliantly and tied it in with death in a vivid manner.
The title gives a clear picture of contrast that reminds us of Spring. It drew my attention.
The poem was pleasing to read aloud with its steady flow and effective rhyme scheme. The soundscape was appealing and it was easy to get engaged in the theme. The atmosphere is well woven as I could enter the experience with my own memories of loss. The metaphors and similies were apt in building the picture. The idea of a memory bringing sadness jumping up unexpectedly is so real. And songs are potent in reviving memories. Bittersweet as I am sure good memories appear and then the loss. 
I noticed a few places where I thought periods might be better than commas. In the last verse I wanted to read a comma after "daffoldil" as the next line ties into it. And maybe a period after "ways." IN verse two maybe a semi colon after song if you don't want a strong pause of a period.
The name of the publisher was comical and fit with the writing. I had to smile at the monkey theory and the test that the publisher set. I laughed to think about the number of pages that his novel is with his special writing. I would need a decoder.
The poem shares how smiles, and kindness are key to relating with others and the world.
Hey Carly! I am happy to review your entry from "
That the poet has not totally given up is evident at the end. Hope still reigns. I like the last line, which states the areas the author wants to shine in and connects back with the line about Broadway. 
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Your first line has a finality to it (the past) and then you bring us to the present with the 'Now' in line 2. The present tense brings immediacy and is perfect for the work. 
The punctuation worked well. I liked how you interrupt the glory of the scene with a question, inviting us into your feeling about spring.
Verse 1
verse 3 
Verse 4 line 1 :"asks" should be past tense too..."asked"
Verse 5: 
Verse 6: 
Verse 7: Line 4 : "bow" needs to be "bows" to make sense though it does not rhyme with "show". 
Your word choices were effective and using all caps or quotes around words added emphasis and attention. Noting the desire for global warning adds to the comical given the way you feel about ice.
The questions in the first line hooked me in. Like who does care about it!
I enjoyed the scattering of different topics in this blog entry..it reminds me of how my mind works. LOL I enjoy playing with tarot and have a few decks. I have not heard of this one you mention. Your description of the Death card was clear and I like how you connected it to media selections. Cool! Did you have an idea of what it might mean for your day when it popped up. 
Your comment on the old movie was neat and I thought of how it contrasted to your racy tarot of today. 
Greetings Kare Enga! Thank you so much for entering the "
Wow! This feels like a dream. The imagery is clear though I need to interpret "ornaments" in order to see what you are seeing in this observation. The haiku has a deep feeling undercurrent that strikes me...and will take time to find the words to express. I like when a work takes me somewhere. That last line is so evocative and potent. 
The haiku has an effective pivot element as I can read and understand it from both directions. It flows well with a phrase and turning point line at the end, contrasting two elements.
The moment in time and kigo is clear. I am not a pro so I add this as a ponder. The word "ornaments" does not seem like a straightforward thing to see...It could be snow cover on the trees, or icicles though I could think in concrete terms as Christmas ornaments.(they come out in winter) I learned that haiku speaks in real terms rather than metaphors and yet I like the creativity of this image.
Wow! I like the clear observation of these specifically named creatures contrasted with the shadows as they fly. Interesting image.
Your haiku has a definite pivot and I liked reading it from the bottom first. I see you used the traditional 5-7-5 pattern effectively with no unnecessary words. I wonder why you didn't center it.
I was entering the observed moment in the present and imagined the birds flying overhead in a winter storm so you could not seem as they would be a similar colour. I really have to ponder more on "shadows". Or there are no shadows as the sun is hidden by the snow. 
Oh I love the clear observation here and the contrast of the images. I could imagine the old bridge and and the lady crying in the moonlight..perhaps expressing a loss or loneliness. The atmosphere is potent. Wonderful turning point from the moonlight, where I may think romantic and beauty to the lady crying...which changes the perspective and make me wonder what may have happened. Well done! 
Frog was the first word I found and Explosion was the last one. The words went in both directions with tricky overlays yet I was not frustrated by trying to uncover the words. Well done.