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Review of Him  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can picture the movie "Phantom of the Opera" as I read your poem. This Phantom you've written about could have been either an older man, or perhaps a ghost. Still she followed him.
My favorite lines are the last two: "And as he rows, I am rocked to sleep."

I spotted no typos or grammar issues with your writing. You described the Phantom in such a way that I can see the scenes clearly as I read them.
I am glad you are finding your way around Writing.com and that you are putting your work out there to be read. I look forward to reading more as you progress.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: A wonderful ABC-style poem about God's love for us.

*PenB* My favorite part: Yes I love you greatly, though I haven't heard from you lately. A gentle reminder that He always has us on His mind.

*PenR* Some suggestions are: The only thing I would have done is made the first letter of each line Bold Font so the ABCs would stand out. I saw no typos or grammar issues in your writing.

*PenG* Overall: A great poem about God's love. You took great thought and care with your writing, and it shows.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Bereaved  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: Though you believe yourself rusty, your poem packs a punch in just a few words. Thank you for sharing the back story to your poem. 40 is such a young age to be ripped apart from your life partner. I couldn't imagine that happening.

*PenB* My favorite part: "why had he gone so far...I could not follow" Death does that to us.

*PenR* Some suggestions are: No typos or grammar issues here! Only thing I would suggest is to keep writing...you're off to a great start!

*PenG* Overall: Such a tragic happening. The hate will settle after a while, but when it is that fresh, then hate is something that happens during grief. You wrote on a tough subject, but you did so gracefully and with respect.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow...what a horrifying experience from the point of an eleven year old. Thank you for sharing this story. For years I was told to watch my weight, and that my sugars were borderline. After not thinking about it, and not paying attention, this year I finally was told that I was diabetic. Not type I but type II. I had to go to a management class and learn how to take care of myself, and also to learn how to read my blood sugar. I do not take insulin, but am on an oral medication. If I do not keep myself in check, then I would have to go onto insulin.

There is so much about diabetes that is preventable and treatable, but people for the most part don't listen. I am glad that you did listen, and that your parents cared enough about you to make sure you were taken care of. But I am sure it was a terrifying experience for a youngster.

Your tale was well thought out and written. I could picture the scenes in my mind as you told them. I saw no typos or grammar issues with the writing. I am glad that you've shared your experience, and that you "chose life". I too, add my prayers that a cure will be found, not only for your type of diabetes, but for mine as well.

Well done!
Sincerely,
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: When death comes to a loved one, especially a life partner, the grief can be overwhelming. I knew about the 7 stages of grief, but not the "firsts" that the narrator talks about. The pain, the numbness, the going through the motions - what a terrible thing to have to live through.

*Penr* How I feel about this: I would tend to agree about the need for some "alone" time. Time for processing and just being able to let go at your own pace. So many decisions and arrangement to be made before hand, it isn't a wonder that someone wouldn't go crazy dealing with it. You wrote about it skillfully and thoughtfully.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I found no typos or grammar issues with your writing. It felt complete, and although a terrible subject, one that does have hope at the end.

*PenR* Overall: Wonderfully written. You have taken a tough thing to live through, and made it one of beautiful memories and of hope to come. I enjoy reading your work, and I look forward to doing so again in the future.


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Review of Hands Quieted  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Unfortunately, that is the way of childhood friends. Even high school and college friends fade away as our lives get so hectic with the fact of living. That is a sad statement of our lives in general.

You write a very touching story in poetic form. I can hear the sadness in your lines- wishing you could reconnect, but being unable to do so.

I saw no grammar issues or typos in your writing. It was from the heart and it translated well to written form.

Thank you for sharing this story.

sincerely,
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Review of Ten  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I like how each verse is interlaced with the next. It tells a simple story of village life, and how the people interact with one another. A cycle of life from an old woman and a young girl, to a grown woman looking for an apprentice.

The rhythm and flow of your story poem is smooth. I saw no typos or grammar issues in the writing. You didn't use ending punctuation, but that did not detract at all from the story. Centering the lines also increased the appeal of the poem.

Thank you for sharing. And as always - well done!

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amy

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Review of To Learn to Fly  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An entertaining poem. I enjoyed the rhyme and flow of your work. I also enjoyed the way you expressed your thrill in the freedom you found while learning to fly. The excitement shows in your writing.
I found no typos or grammar issues. The format made the poem seem to have a sing-song "bounce" to it.
I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end. This is an older piece, but it is timeless in it's subject. I hope you find the freedom to fly always.
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Review of The Fire  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: A telling poem about passion and the fire it produces inside the narrator.

*Penr* How I feel about this: The imagery you paint with your words is vivid. All of the words describe the "fire" and there is nothing to put it out.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: You seem to be writing the poem in an AABB style, which carries through except for the first two lines. Other than that, it was spot-on for style.

*PenR* Overall: A wonderful poem about the unquenchable fires of passion. I notice this is an older work, but it is still fresh for one who is engulfed by such a fire. Well done *Smile*


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Review of Desperate Acts  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: A heart wrenching question of "Why?" permeates your writing. Why do they leave? What hurt so badly that they had no other way? Why did you leave those behind to question? A very tough subject to write about.

*Penr* How I feel about this: The title is very appropriate. I like the way you've formatted they rhyme in an ABAB style.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I spotted to typos or grammar issues in your writing. The rhythm and rhyme are smooth. The poem, though emotional flowed easily off the tongue.

*PenR* Overall: You've don an excellent job writing about a hard subject. You gave it the respect and the questioning that it deserves, without judgement. Well done.


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Review of Tales of Terror  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
The page is set up well. The graphics are chilling, and add to the flavor of "Terror" that you've set up. This is not normally a genre that I would choose, but as of late my writings have taken on a darker twist. Since I'm not settled into any one genre as of yet, I may expand my wings here and check it out.
I'm not sure how often you open this contest/activity up, so will have to keep an eye open for posts in the newsfeed.
I also notice there are several "invalid" items on the survey for "The Scribes" and there is one on the front page here.
This sounds like a promising adventure, and I will check in on this forum again. I hope that it continues and grows. There are a lot of promising writers for this genre that I have come across, and I think they could benefit from a forum such as this.

Sincerely,
amy
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: You've written about the life of a beggar in the Victorian era. The scenery reflected in your words paint a vivid image of this. I can see the scene clearly in my mind as I read it. It is almost as though the beggar is invisible and the only thing seen is the cup. Most people would hurry away from such a sight, as it is not their nature to stop to help.

*PenB* My favorite part: I like how you repeat the first two lines as the last two lines. It shows a clear distinction between the beggar and those who he would ask help from.

*PenR* Some suggestions are: I really saw no grammatical issues with your writing and I saw no typos either. The poem was well thought out and written.

*PenG* Overall: I am glad that you found an outlet for your writing here at Writing.com. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Love is a sunset  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: You've done a wonderful job in comparing love to a spectacular sunset.

*Penr* How I feel about this: You use your words to paint a vivid image. I can picture it clearly in my mind. The colors blending together to create a one of a kind masterpiece. You also show the sadness of the coming evening, and that you will never see such loveliness again. Another wondrous masterpiece, maybe, but never the identical one again. So is it with love. There may be other kinds of love, but never will you have an identical one.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I found no grammatical issues or typos in your writing. I can see nothing to make it better, as it is perfect as it is.

*PenR* Overall: This is an older piece, but I am glad that I got to read it and review it. You've done a great job. I look forward to reading more of your work again in the future.


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Review of Lost on the River  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Boat2* Thank you for sharing your short story. I am excited to give you a review, with the hopes you will find it encouraging and helpful.

*Anchor* What an adventure. Starting out as a pleasant day's journey, then turning into nearly a nightmare. I didn't blame you for having such a scare. I also don't blame you for taking better precautions after that, and less surprised to see the boat being sold after a while.

*Boat2* You painted vivid images with your writing. As I read, I could picture each scene as you described it. I like that there is a "good Samaritan" law in place for those who get stranded on the water. You were very lucky/blessed to have had someone come by when they did.

*Anchor* I spotted no typos or grammar issues with your writing. I was a little puzzled by the listing of life jackets so close together in the second paragraph. It just seemed a little redundant to me, but it did not affect the flow of the overall flow of the story.

*Boat2* I enjoyed reading your short story. I understand why you changed the name of the man in your story, but things happen. *Smile* Overall, you did an excellent job with this work. I appreciated the opportunity to review it, and I look forward to reading more of your work again soon.

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#1300305 by Maryann




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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, this is a very in depth review. I like the example you gave, and it makes it easier to understand what people are looking for in their reviews. I have the encouragement part down, but I would like to get stronger in the "suggestions" section. Some things I find great as is, and I tell the writer so. Other times I point out a few misspellings. I imagine some of that will come with confidence.

You had a clear and organized manner on how you reviewed this work. It was great to see a workable example of how to give a "meat and potatoes" review.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Thank you for compiling this informative paper. It shows a lot of thought and effort in your research. I also appreciate the footnotes at the bottom of your text for further reviewing. It is amazing how some people try to get ahead by "helping themselves" to other's work. And while there are some distinct differences, it is nice to know that ideas for writing are not all that unique. The phrase "there is nothing new under the sun" truly does have meaning. Apparently it's all in how you go about presenting your work.
Your writing is thought-provoking and relevant, especially on a writing site. I spotted no grammar issues or typos in your writing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for taking the time to research and share this information. It has been amazing and at the same time disturbing the amount of "free" stuff that gets passed around and not acknowledged or given proper credit. I have been guilty of this at times, without thinking anything of it, and I am glad that this paper has brought it to the attention that it deserves.

Your paper was well written and thought out. I was a little disappointed that the link you provided at the end of your paper is no longer available, but other than that, a most excellent and thought-provoking paper.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Thank you for taking the time to share this helpful information. I knew of each of the terms, but now I have a much better understanding of what each entails. Even if you aren't a "person of means" it is probably a good idea to have these documents done and made available in the event of one's being incapacitated or death. It is also a good reminder for those who tend to be procrastinators (such as myself). I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting point of view. I often wondered about things like this: intellectual property and copyrights, etc. You put it in a format that is easy to understand, and actually makes "sense". I appreciate the time and effort you took into writing this, and it is always nice to know of someone who has "been there, done that". Your paper is well thought out and organized. I spotted no typos or grammar issues in the work.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A wonderful tribute to a mother's love. Good times and bad times, and even the sad times. A mother who loves no matter what. I liked how you repeated the last lines of the first two stanzas and then added the "I" in the third stanza. Who could imagine such heartbreak? Your love and devotion are evident in this poem. You've done an excellent job capturing the memories, both happy and sad. Well done in thought and execution of writing.

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Review of Ohio  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts:A wonderful tongue-in-cheek piece about the chilly weather. As a former northern Michigan native, I totally understand!

*PenB* My favorite part:The last two lines made me laugh out loud..."I could never leave Ohio ever, Because I'm frozen to the ground!"

*PenR* Some suggestions are:This is a free form poem. There really isn't a rhyme scheme. There were no typos or grammar issues with your writing. It works well though, with the humor infused into your poem.

*PenG* Overall:A humorous poem that only "northerners" can really understand. You really nailed it! I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I can't wait to read more of your work.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Lovers  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: This is a short poem, but it does pack quite the punch!

*PenB* My favorite part:Was the buildup of passion and love in the voice of the narrator.

*PenR* Some suggestions are:I found no grammar issues or typos with your work. Well done!

*PenG* Overall:It's amazing that people are so stuck on the "package" rather than the actual gift itself. You tackle a tough subject, and one that I am sure can be quite painful with panache. I enjoyed reading your poem, and I feel sympathy for the narrator. I only hope one day, the "package" won't matter, if there is love to be had.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Your Person  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts:I can sense the frustration that your writing brings out. Those that are not happy with themselves often reflect their unhappiness unto others they consider "different". But I also see encouragement for individuals to remain true to themselves, regardless of what others think. Who gets to decide what is normal, anyway?

*PenB* My favorite part:The last stanza: being "weird","strange", or "odd" is a choice, and you applaud those differences.

*PenR* Some suggestions are:I spotted no typos or grammatical issues in your writing. It was well thought out and executed.

*PenG* Overall:I applaud you for the subject matter, and for writing from your heart. I enjoyed reading your poem from beginning to end, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Fallen  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts:It is a dark piece of poetry. A glorious being at first, now transformed into an unimaginable creature.

*PenB* My favorite part:Where he cries out, but his cries fall on deaf ears.

*PenR* Some suggestions are:I found nothing to suggest. No grammar issues or typos here in your writing! It was well executed.

*PenG* Overall:You give vivid imagery of the transformation from Light to Dark. I could clearly picture the change as I read your work. It gave me goose bumps to think of such a transformation. You've done an excellent job here.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression:I am excited that you have tried to spread your wings and write in a different genre. Nothing like getting out of our "comfort zone", huh?

*Penr* How I feel about this:I was intrigued from the beginning. I like how she prefers a shortened name to her "given" name. The change of scenes was smooth, and well thought out. The tension building was done quite well.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: "and grand thief" - perhaps "and grand theft"?

"the worse storm" - perhaps "the worst storm"? Other than that, I didn't see any other grammar issues.

*PenR* Overall:I didn't want to quit reading this story. I do hope that there will be a part two soon! LOL. You've ventured into new territory with great success, I believe. Great Job!


sincerely,

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