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Review of She wont smile  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As a person who has struggled with depression myself, I can totally relate to this poem. Well done. Keep up the good work.
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Review of Raw and Easy  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great poem. I would suggest using some commas, or semi-colons-- well written overall.
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Review of kite  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like it. I felt you may have missed some commas within parts, yet overall... sounds good-- keep writing.
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Review of Torn  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (5.0)
great poem- keep up the good work
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Review of Dear Daddy  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. I'm really at a loss for words. I wish I were you're daddy. No child should feel this way. Trust me, I can relate. My father left me when I was 9 months old, and I didn't meet him until I was 36, after I suffered a heart attack. I'm 40 now, and I am over him. He had his chance to include me in his life. It's his loss, not mine. It's not our fault who are parents are, and I hope you value you're life more now. The poem is tight, and scary at the same time. I've never read anything more real. Take care, and if you ever feel down... hit me up. I'm a good listener, and I understand you're pain. 10 stars... in my book.
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Review of Monster  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great poem. Reminds me of my own style. Check out my poem called "Imagine", if you're feeling up to it.
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Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great poem, however I didn't really like the repeating of the same sentence, in each verse. It's only my opinion from a readers POV. Maybe it's a style I'm just not used to. Overall, great job, keep it up.
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Review of The Sewer  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Creepy, suspenseful. I like it. Flash fiction is fun. It's quick and right to the point, and in the end, you want more.
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Review of Poke  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Great story. I would just suggest spacing each line. It just makes it easier to read. Great job.
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Review of Fire Frogs  
Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like it. I am not experienced with free verse poetry. Could you send me an e-mail, explaining how to write free verse? Thanks, Adam S.
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Review by JustAdam40
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I really like it-- love the descriptions
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Review by JustAdam40
Rated: E | (2.5)
Not bad. You might wanna add to it, and explain more. Each line seems like a different subject. I'm not really understanding what your expressing. Keep writing....
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