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Review of Spider Poem  
Review by Pandemonium
Rated: E | (4.5)
Stunningly simple, but I love the message. Good work.
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Review of Plans  
Review by Pandemonium
Rated: E | (4.0)
All in all, it was okay. It didn't really get to me. I think maybe that this is partly due to the repetition. To me, it just got old. I do like the last stanza, however.

What I would do, would be to try different formats. It might be an idea to try to fit a rhyming scheme in there someplace.

If you do decide to edit it, please drop me a line. I'd be interested to see what you've done with this piece.

Best of luck,
Pan.
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Review of Dance  
Review by Pandemonium
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Thats how I feel when I dance...Lovely...

~Pan

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