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I will read your story once (only re-read if necessary), search for grammar mistakes and let you know, and give suggestions on writing style and plot if needed.
I'm good at...
Grammar, basic review
Favorite Genres
Action/Adventure, Mystery/Suspense, Sci-Fi, Realistic Fiction, Historical Fiction, Horror, Romance
Least Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Fanfiction, Biography, How-To/Instructional, Supernatural
Favorite Item Types
Chapter
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Plays
I will not review...
Poetry, play/movie scripts
Public Reviews
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Review of Fit or Fat?  
Review by Ryan Monahan
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello! First off, thanks for asking me to review your interactive story!

Just to let you know before you continue reading, I will be completely honest in my opinions.

Ok. So lets begin.

1) These "rapid weight gain" stories aren't really my thing, but I felt like giving yours a try.
2) I found the general idea to be fairly interesting (since I'm new to this type of int. story).
3) You had some grammar errors throughout the whole thing (my route and the original part) that need to be fixed. I can go back and tell you each individual one if you want me to do that.
4) It would be nice if these int. stories had more of the different routes chosen and completed as much as the ones I chose. If you would be able to go back and fill them out, that would be great!
5) Overall, I thought it was pretty decent. Keep on writing!
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