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Review of Torment  
Review by akaluv
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There's a lot of emotion in this piece with the contrast between the girl being pretty but thinking she's ugly. You can feel the pain here, like she's locked away in a place she can't escape from. I also liked your use of words. When I read this, I thought of an abused girl walking in the dark, remembering a time when she wasn't in pain. Wonderful work!
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for entry "Prologue" 
Review by akaluv
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The prologue gets you into the main character's mind and lets readers learn about the world. The writing was smooth, and your use of words was great! I didn't spot any repeated words or work echoes. I also enjoyed your descriptions. I didn't rate five stars because a prince who doesn't want to be a prince is pretty typical, but I'll keep reading the story to see what makes it different from other fantasy stories.
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Review of The Dream  
Review by akaluv
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! This was a really good, creepy short story. The writing was smooth; nothing felt telly and all the pieces of information were dropped so well. Awesome job!
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