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Review by Sandy
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi RHWFH,

I really enjoyed reading this, it certainly wasn't 'thrown together'.

This poem is very nicely composed. The extended metaphor of composition, moves smoothly into reflection on commitment and choice ,with a sense of trepidation maintaing an air of cautious indecision, giving the poem just the right amount of tension and keeping the whole thing together.

'evoke the abbatoir--
leaving you naked and reeling
from the multiplicity of choices.'

The language is sensual and evocative, then wistful:

'What would be my one fervent wish?'

Indecision wins the day; and life after all is transient:

'Things weary, things break, things fade away.
How to decide what to save?'

Hesitancy provides its own justification:

'A life isn't something
you just throw together.'

The first four lines are repeated at the end of the poem, and that one reflective thought brings the poem full circle.

Painters are able to capture a still life on canvas; you have managed, very skillfully, to capture a moment of reflection.

Great Stuff!

Sandy








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