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Rated: E | (3.0)
I enjoyed the scheme of the story in regards to going to the different places of the hospital in order to learn something about them that influences the character in some way. The introductory paragraph was engaging except that I felt somewhat confused at some points such as the meaning of this "...but rid me of her memories" and also the statment that all her mum left her was a letter which, for me, conflicted with her mum's last wish to see the hospital. Perhaps if that wish was somehow written into the letter it would make for a more complete piece but I feel that the mum's wish is out of place without there being a referent to it somewhere in the piece. I thought the message of the piece was inspiring and I enjoyed the imagery invoked in some of the paragraphs such as the watermelon one! Hope my review helps you!
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