This was an interesting subject. but the last sentence of the first paragraph could be made clearer. about the questions. it was written intelligently. I am also into self-help books, and I like how you made me ponder this question, "who am I?" I often wonder what my purpose is. and I think we are vessels of god, to learn the fruits of the spirit, like love, patience, and forgiveness...kindness. but everyone is an individual. you are made up of many different parts, to form the whole of who you are. you are love. you are yourself, whoever that may be. just some thoughts on your work.
Your poem about grief is perfect. We all should have a right to grieve. Your poem is important. It helped me see that my pain is real, and should be validated, or at least allowed. Thank you.
Such raw emotion, which is great!! This poem cries out to God for answers! For justice!! Reading it made me very sad. I don't even drink, but hope that this poem would change some people. The message is strong, and clear. Great job!!
Keep up the great work!! I admire your ambition!!
I really like the message of this poem. I like how you said, "you might find something unexpected inside, if you go along for the ride."-(often, how I feel about my boy-friend~)
I like the title 'reflection.' and that the reflection is lying to you. Well, my opinion is, for personal sake, if you have a sad face, then, that reflection wouldn't lie to you. Rhyming is a lot of fun. suggestion-maybe try and make a closer number of syllables for each stanza.
this would make it flow better. also suggestion 2- i like rhyming a lot too, but venture out, into your poetry...and try to create a poem, that does not rely on rhyming. think of the flow, say it out loud. is it smooth?? you can go different places, when you're not rhyming too.
i really loved this poem. there is meter and canter. the messages you write are profound!!
you get your message across clearly. good job!! and keep up with your writing!!
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You're style and flow are both beautiful, along with the inspiring message. I am not good at reviewing poetry, for not good at writing poems. Sometimes, they can be hard for me to understand. But, sure this all has a deeper meaning, I caught the main gist of it. It is positive. You have a lot of writing talent, a lot of potential, and this is almost perfect, if not perfect.
And I am the girl, too, who can't afford nice clothes. This ringed true to me, as well as humble, and honest. The writing flows so well, the prose flows beautifully. You have a great talent at poetry!! Keep up the good writing!! The message is good and insightful.
Happy writing back to you!!
Very good writing and inspiring too. I like poems of advice and faith and a mother's love. could you please review my 2 items in my portfolio? amy roche.
This is written very well. I needed to hear this. Been coming across too many that I "wrinkle my nose at" and make me cringe.
hard to find poetry that flows in rhythm nicely.....!! Great job!
Hello. I read your blog on coffee. It is good. I am also a coffee addict. Getting to Starbucks, actually controls my life!! I will drive miles in traffic everyday to get my fix! And make it at home too. Good to know it keeps you alert. I have also heard from experts, that coffee actually helps you focus more too, which is a bonus for me. It also prevents a certain kind of cancer. can't remember which. It might have helped me lose 20 lbs too. But, too much half n half can get to me too. Well, from another coffee connoisseurs, here's a review for you! Amy Roche. Question?? How do you click on book item in your portfolio to write blogs?? I am trying to write a blog, and the book item won't light up. Amy.
A truly brave endeavor to write this. Great work on yourself, and writing it all down!! I encourage you to keep up the writing about these things. And forgiveness is an awesome thing to write about!! Engaging, and thought-provoking. and the thoughts are your very own!!! Awesome to see original thoughts. please if you can, review my story too. amy roche.
This is very nicely flowing prose that is also very engaging to the reader. It is a sorrowful message, but dealt with pride and honor to oneself. It rings so true to a dignity and strength that is hard to find. I commend your writing this, and your talent. amy roche.
this is convoluted and confusing. much work needs done, unless this was just an off-the-cuff writing project. seems personal, and only understood by the person it's meant for.
this is like a stern warning. but one of substance and truth. a warning for people to not waste their lives away, letting others destroy them. it is more like a personal statement. and an honest opinion of those who do. yeah, it comes off as a little angry, but that is how a lot of people need to hear it. i know these people. good for you, in writing it down! good word choices too. please, if you can, review my short-story. amy roche.
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