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Review of Pleading carrot  
Review by Andrew Mangan
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Your basic plot seems fine... But your grammar and punctuation definitely need work. Really, keep going. It seems good. Two of the things that really got me were the weird paragraphs and the comma splices. FREAKING COMMA SPLICES. Also, remember to capitalize every sentence. It really looks like a rush job, so spend more time on your stories.
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