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Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent story! Truly worthy of ancient Greek mythology. I enjoyed the detail you put into it, especially the detail about the extinction of the dinosaurs. That was completely ingenious. :P

I do have a suggestion, though. It gets slightly confusing exactly who is talking when you have several characters conversing in the same paragraph. You can separate the paragraphs by who is talking, and it can help the reader differentiate between the characters and their lines. Just a suggestion, and I'm way over-picky anyway. :P Other than that, keep half an eye on some of the grammar.

Still, a fantastic read, and I have to admit that now I'm half-convinced that's how it actually happened. The gods were admirable and believable, and the details were fresh and original. Keep writing!
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