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Review of I Miss the Days  
Review by Abby Nolan
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed your poem. As a teenage girl, I can relate to the subject matter. I also like your format; it is very original. I was a bit confused by the ending, though. Was it cut off on purpose? I was sort of left wondering what boys were now, since girls are artificial, which I certainly agree can be the case.
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Review of The Wishing Well  
Review by Abby Nolan
Rated: E | (3.5)
The plot is well developed and the concept is interesting. I certainly enjoyed your story. For constructive criticism, I would say try to change up you language a bit, it will really help with the flow of your sentences. Try not to use the word "got" too much, and maybe replace "the Club" with it or The Wishing Well or something once in a while. If you read the story out loud you will notice the somewhat overuse a little more in the future. Overall, though, it was really good, and I hope this helps!
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Review by Abby Nolan
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This story was very cute, with a casual tone that added a lightheartedness to the story that would've otherwise been missed. Creative use of the prompt as well. A couple small errors were made; for instance, when you said "Cheaper and less expensive", that was kinda redundant since those two things convey the same meaning. Overall, really good job though! I liked it.
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