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16 Public Reviews Given
19 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I aim to be helpful and kind. I like smart, well-crafted writing but know from my experience and others' that it takes a while to get there and that being callous can cause lasting self-doubt and scars. I also know the hunger that comes from needing, wanting people to read your work and appreciate it.
I'm good at...
I can't seem to help noticing typos and grammar issues. Also good at evaluating tone, descriptions, etc. I have major ADHD so if it doesn't interest me at the outset, I'll have to really work to keep going. But I will, unless there's so many basic errors that I give up. Please make the effort of multiple read-throughs before asking for reviews.
Favorite Genres
Drama, love, Sci-Fi, action, adventure, erotica... I'm open-minded and inclusive as well as not easily shocked by content.
Least Favorite Genres
Fanfic.
Favorite Item Types
I'm always fascinated by journeys. How people get from one metaphorical place to another. How they interact.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't like political rhetoric or religious preaching. No gratuitous violence or abuse. Outside of erotica sex should advance the story, tell you something about the characters.
I will not review...
Gratuitous violence, glorification of abuse, anything like that. Like I said, I'm not easily shocked but there's a lot of things I don't want to fill my head with.
Public Reviews
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Review by Azul
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is fun. And on the nose.

It also reminds me of Shel Silverstein.

It was all rolling along smoothly until the eighth stanza and then your rhyme scheme fell away. Apologies if I use the wrong terms, as I'm not a dedicated poetry afficionado.

Overall, well done.


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Review by Azul
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I'm extremely impressed.

Your world (galaxy?) building is superb. Your mastery of tone and pacing so far is excellent. I love the unusual names. It leads me to believe that either South Africa or The Netherlands managed to somehow come to preeminence and launched into space. My brain tripped over Elisonore, wanting to turn it into Elsinore, but that's just me. Bandersnatchi made me grin, as well as Mau.

I'm intrigued by Elam and want to know how he's come to be so misanthropic and hopeless. The micro expressions are a nice touch. I'm already glimpsing the shadowy shape of a professional and personal life that went up in flames, so to speak. Poor Ivar and Elam.

The first instance of "Torrance" is spelled with two As.

Otherwise, I couldn't find a single thing to nitpick and that's really rare. I can't wait to read the next chapter and learn more.



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Review of Reality Check CH1  
Review by Azul
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This is fascinating, lighting upon universal doubts and questions about what follows life.

It brings questions to mind and that's promising. What happens next with this character? What is his daily existence like? Where will he end up? Things like that. I'd want to read more about this person.

The dialogue is good and I only have little nitpicks about punctuation, so well done there.

I feel that you're on a good track with the stubble on his face, but you don't need to explain what that means. Details like that speak for themselves, that he is unkempt and what that might entail. This happens a few times and strikes me as a confidence issue. Let your readers extrapolate for themselves from the picture you are painting for them. Let them think.

"Edward haven't said this to anyone before." 'haven't' doesn't agree with the sentence.

Well done. Keep writing. It's an ever-evolving process and a long road, so keep going.

I'd like to see this again after a few revisions.





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Review of Garbage collector  
Review by Azul
Rated: E | (3.5)
I'm intrigued and I want to know what happens next for this nameless character. The atmosphere is well sketched. The tense switches back and forth within paragraphs and there is some word use that needs tweaking but it's a great start.


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