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Review of Spectrum  
Review by A. B. Mukoro
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really enjoyed your poem. I thought it was incredibly descriptive and I could really feel the life, the energy, in every single line.

It reminds me of Aboriginal Origin stories (where they write stories to figure out the origins of the world around them). Although I do advise to put comas at the end of your poems just to make it flow.

Example:
I am a spectrum?
I am light bending in glass?

My favorite line:
Rest with me and I shall tell you secrets,
Arcane nothings of the world
For I am rainbow
A windless whisper on the Earth

I got shivers reading that line.
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