I really love this story line and where it was going, and it was very well written including all the chapters before this, but I've noticed that you've just ended story lines when they still had a lot more going for them or they had just begun. I feel like this has a lot of potential to be one of the greats, but if you keep ending stories for no reason like this no one is going to want to write chapters for it because there's nothing to add to. You do know how to tell a good story thought I especially love this story line and the Mom emo one, those two alone would've given you a 4.5 stars and with all the other chapters it would've been a 5 star but with all of the story lines just ending abruptly for no reason I'll have to give it 3 stars but I hope you know that my review can and will change so please take this criticism and use it to fix when you add to this interactive.
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