I like the way you've profiled the Goddess but didn't reveal who she actually was until the end.
The only suggestions I'd like to make is to dig a little deeper for some imagery and making it a point somewhere to include the ancient existence of the Goddess. For example:
"She reveals herself everywhere on the earth" - Could equal something like=
"She is radiant through both sun and moon"
It implies that she is everywhere while painting an image and poetry is all about the impression someone walks away with. What symbols will allow the reader to interpret what you're trying to say without you having to directly say it?
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