Wow! I like your story. I got carried away. I actually said, "Oh! Mr. G, don't go out of the bar!" - Thus, the effect of characterization, you have made them alive. :)
And the twist of who got the money surprised me, it is like "am i watching a movie?".
I like the ending...in a solid thud...dramatic.
One thing I hope it would have not been is the title...Trials and Tribulations. I think it deserves a better one. :)
Oh! I never thought reading history would be as relaxing as this.
At first, i was about to ignore this short story because I always doze off whenever history is being tackled. However, the font color caught the curious cat.
I am lucky to have read this one. It is well-written! I did not notice i've reached the end of it.
Even the characters are interesting and vivid.
Now, i am curious to know more about the Life in Medieval England.
This is a professional's piece, i couldn't afford to give comments but guidance from someone like you.
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