A very moving, empathic look at the pain and suffering endured by a family who slowly lose a member to cancer. The characters, the plot and dialogue were all carefully crafted to be more painful than melodramatic. A very skilled and well crafted story. Kudos and best of luck to you in future endeavours. I envy you your talent, and hope it was not something your own family experienced. is that one of your pre-requisites for writing, a personal experience?
A tale of anger, pain, weakness and hate all unfolding with an incredible use of words. The ending was stranegly unsatisfying, but perhaps that is what poets do. They make us wonder what really happened or what happened next. Still a fascinating bit of writing. Well done.
Wow! A very dramatic, and somewhatironic look at an inmate's last day. You combined character, dialogue and a suspenseful plot very well. You have given me something to aim for as a writer. Good luck to you in future endeavours. I found it interesting the way your plot evolved.
A very descriptive and empathic look at the atpomic bombing of Hiroshima by a child on the ground. You have a real flair for writing, especially something as dramatic and emotional as this story. I wish you the very best of luck with your future endeavours. Can't wait to read more of your work.
A good piece of writing with plot and suspense and humor as well. A sword named Bruice? How original! I think the story could have used more description of the characters,but otherwise an interesting tale. Good luck to you in your future endeavours in Writng.com and may your weapons have interesting names and adventures.
Wow! You are writing a whole book about this Jo Butler and so far it look s very descripive, and fascinating! Do you actually work for a law firm? You obviously have some keen insights into women in the workplace, and your work reflects it. The writing is funny and somewhat poignnant. One can actually feel for a woman who has been trying to work and earn respect for her mind and her character. And one can just picture the characters and their accents and the bustling city around them. North Shore sounds like a hot bed of intrigue and wealthy poeple crawling over each other to get to the top. I must there some time.
In the brief length of your story, you included so many emotions and a very realistic look at euthanasia. How are you able to use such an economy of words so well? I truly envy you. Congratulations and best of luck.
I found your story both well-written and deeply moving. You have a genuine way with words that I envy. Writing.com is meant to educate and inspire people, but the more portfolios I read, the more I wonder if I'm in over my head. Even with the amateurs. Your dialogue and character description and your flow of events and feelings is incredible. I wish you best of luck. You have a unique vision. Keep sharing it with others.
Your story was very well written, with vidid action and suspense, with some wry hunmour thrown in. I don't read a lot of fantasy, with the exception of some alternate histroy. But your work shows a great deal of promise. My only concern is that the descriptions of the charatcres, other than the dragons, were not detailed. What about the pilots of the other dragons? what did they look like? Nonetheless a very satisying read. Good luck and flame on.
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