This is quite a good free-verse, and is quite inspiring. I comprehended it in a way that one should never give up, and always just be yourself, and people will realize who you truly are, and will eventually grow to accept who you are. (Granted, this is just my own opinion.)
First off, I really did not know what the "LINK TEXT HERE" was for, perhaps an issue when creating the story. The story itself was an interesting, but I feel that more examples of lighthouses throughout time would be beneficial. Perhaps listing off some other ones before 1700, if there are any.
Definitely an interesting start to a story. The setting you described seemed closely related to Skyrim in my opinion. As for the story, I did not notice any grammatical or spelling errors, so it was quite well written. I wish you the best of luck in your contest.
Ok, so I posted on your third story before realizing that it was the third story in the series, so I decided to read this one also, and I am very impressed. Once again, I would Reaaaallllllly like more of these slime girl stories. I will try to read the first and fourth stories when i get the chance!
I enjoyed this story so much that I may try to read the others in the series once I get some time to do so. I enjoy all stories that involve slime creatures and vore, so try to make more when you get the time to do so. I will be sure to read them.
"A country tune's absurdity" Nice one! This has a great meter and rhyme to it, almost like a song's lyrics rather than a poem. Even though I don't regularly enjoy poetry, I am glad to say that I did enjoy this poem... a little. (even if I hate to say it.)
I like all of the technology mentioned in the story, and I also feel it was written quite well, even if it is the first chapter in a series. I an interested in seeing where is series will go if you decide to continue to expand more on the different aspects.
"Then the Inquisitorial Tower exploded." This saying shook me hard. Some elaboration on this story would make it far better to read. The plot itself reminded me of the "Psycho-pass" series in the way that people can read other people's emotions and must react based on what is going on in the person's head.
Overall it was short, but i am interested on what a sequel to the story would contain.
So sad. From what I have experienced, this scenario is one of the worst to imagine. I once had a close friend that i would travel with, and losing a close friend that one has known for a very long time can be extremely painful.
Overall, the flow and order to the story was good, but I felt that it was lacking and in-depth experience in some of the areas they visited.
Overall, I think that a Transform/Shrink story should not be limited to being only PG. You can expect some things to occur that may not be "appropriate" for say. The interactive is short, and I feel that ideas may run short once the interactive becomes more lengthy. As a fan of the whole vore/transform genre, I could not throughly enjoy a PG title without some humor and perhaps a bit of erotic content (but not as much as a GC or XGC title).
Short, but entertaining to read. I at first did not understand this story at all, until just about the end, the whole "Mistmaker" being an insect's view of what a pesticide would be. For some reason, "A bug's life" came to mind when I read this story xD.
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