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Review by casey
Rated: E | (3.5)
There was definately a lot of energy in this piece! I felt like I could almost feel that fresh, weightless, care-free mood through osmosis. At some points, however, I felt like there might have been a little bit of description overkill, where some of the descriptions you chose were so intense that to me it felt almost grating- kind of like the pastel Techni-Color in "The Wizard of Oz."
Your last paragraph my favorite. It was so smooth and beautifully written, it gave a serene, peaceful ending to a vibrant story.
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