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Review of Gravity  
Review by Li'l B
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
It's a good story, I'm curious to his response as well as the response her friends have to her new view. It was very discriptive, especailly at the begginning. You're good at showing the reader exactly what emotions your main character has. The only thing I'm unsure about is her sudden turn around seemed brief but the light buld going of usually is.
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Review of Dreamland prison  
Review by Li'l B
Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked the story, it was a very original storyline. The only reason I didn't give it a five was that it didn't leave me waiting for more, which is very hard to do in this short a story. Your grammar and spelling loked right. I liked all the discriptive phrases, they were very good and painted a rather thorough picture.
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Review of The Frozen Land  
Review by Li'l B
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I liked the story, it was original and interesting. However, I noticed you skipped a word in "Something that had not been visible as climbed down from the cave". Also, I'm not sure tousle is a word. If it is, it was a nice useage, but I belive that is just the verb, the noun acting more as an adjective. I looked on Dictionary.com and it seemed to say it was also a noun, but I've never heard it without the -ed unless it is the verb. Other than those two items it was well written and enjoyed.
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