Wow! You are a fantastic writer. This story has blown me away, I was actually scared reading the conversation between the main character and the spirit. It takes a lot to scare me, I am a real sucker for this genre. Your writing is the best I have read in a very long time. I have written a couple of short stories myself, I would love for you to read and review them for me if you have the time.
This poem to me says the writer is having a conversation with his loved one, or partner. he is explaining that he has been less than perfect throughout his life, and is going some way to describe his influences along the way. This poem is also a promise to that person that he will try his best to be a better man. Loevly piece.
I have written two short stories, please read and review when yo have the time. Thanks.
This story really did frighten me. It reminds me very much of the scariest movie I have ever seen, Stephen King's IT. From that movie onwards I have been afraid of clowns, fairgrounds and the circus! The end part of the story where they boy has dreams of his friends and other unsavory charactors, and the words he hears are paticularly disturbing. Good work! I have written a short scary story, i would love if you could read it when you have time.
I have found your short story very funny, and find myself moaning away on a day to day basis about these very same problems, and i live in England :D It seems this downturn in the Economy is very far reaching indeeed ! Ha ha :D
I also found the latter part of the story about your neighbour very touching.
I have really enjoyed reading this piece of writing, as i have enjoyed the other stories/ poems of yours that i have reviewed. This one has a real sense of love spanning all space and time. The use of grammer, however could be tightened up a bit. On the whole :D
Again, some really lovely warm, spiritual, inspiring words about love. Love that is reaching over all space and time, for a life partner or soul mate. i really like the line ' and which lays in the hands of our merciful, all knowing creator'. However, watch the grammer.
I find this poem, or love letter, to be sweet, charming, innocent and endearing to read. There are some really lovely descriptive naratives in here, such as 'during these warm and chatty hellos'. However, i feel the grammer may need to be re looked over.
I totally agree. Social media, especially Facebook, has an extremely dark side. More and more people are becoming savvy to this and are backing away from it slowly. A year ago even people on my protected, private FB account were updating their every move. Now everyone has become far more selective in their choice of words. I for one am very careful with what i post, and what i now allow others to post about me on both FB and twitter. Bravo! Well said!
I would say these words could make good song lyrics, is that their purpose i wonder? or words to include in a love letter? or is it a poem about a man not wanting his one night stand to be over? Very good either way :D I am a new writer too and have just joined :D
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