I think this story is very good, although I noticed a grammar/typo issue "I caught more fish then him" it should be than him. Other than that I think that I would not change anything, good work!
I have to be honest with you, I absolutely loved it! I think that it is extremely good. You could easily make it longer and add more depth to it. Then just add a few more characters and you have a nice story ready to be posted or published! I think you should follow this storyline to the end! Have a nice day. Keep up the good work!
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