nice poem. Your poem could flow better in a format that helps the reader. sentences should be shorter syllables some what the same number per sentence. all of this helps the poem.
Your poem is so disturbing. I believe you are young and are grieving, but if you give yourself a chance this time will pass. There are people to meet and places to go, love to be had. so say your goodbyes and try to get on to the next part of your life. don't waste your youth.
And keep writing.
Your poem dips with left wing goo. At least Bush and Cheney stood up and responed to the cry of those lost on 911. They protected this country and yes even you for eight years. You scream and rant, call those of the conservative party dispicable names and expect respect back, you deface the flag, you make me sick.
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