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Review of sacrficial ill  
Review by Common Man
Rated: E | (3.0)
You use the word "sigh" at the beginning. That is distracting to me. The sigh is implied in the piece. Also the last two lines of the poem are over-long and awkward. I would edit to make a smoother reading. That will help the piece have a consistent structure.
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