You captured the teenage anger part very well. I believe more, just in general, would benefit this story a whole lot. It's hard to review since there isn't must to it. However, the opening letter to Mom was a good touch, if you continue with this peice into a novel (hint hint :P) maybe opening each chapter with a letter to her that pertains to what he is going through would be good. Also, I suggest more heart in it. There is more going on than just anger for this young boy, he feels much more perhaps too much more. If i could I would suggest making him moody and having his interior monologue reflect that. One small thing puts him at the top of the world while the same is true in reverse. Overall, i wish there were more because I really would like to know what happens. Thank you and keep writing!...Really keep writing this story so I know what happens.
This was raw and fresh, I really liked it. It was interesting to read something like this in letter form. I could feel the honest emotion and intensity.
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