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Review of Conscience  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
So, true, so true. I loved the way your words flowed together. One thing followed to the next smoothly. There was only one line, that didn't quite fit into the rest of the way your poem was written.

"Way to many people,
who tell us what to do."

Maybe it would sound better as either,

'Way too many people,
tell us what to do.' or...

'There's too many people,
who tell us what to do.'

Great job though, I'm glad you wrote this. :)
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