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Review by DarkChoc
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed your story. I liked the theme of sexism and the way that you proved the men wrong! One thing to keep in mind for the future is "Show, Don't Tell" You could have maybe included some dialogue and so on instead of narrating the entire story. On the whole, a very enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!
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Review by DarkChoc
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. It was quite amusing when you declared that it didn't matter if it made you fat and that you couldn't help yourself from diving into it! The rhyming in your poem was interesting, subtle but still prominent and clever. Good work and keep writing!
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