First off I have to say AMAZING TITLE! It hooked my attention right away! You paint a very clear picture of the land and weather. It gave me chills. There is a clear rhythm to this poem. There is a clear need for the rains to come again. Great Job!
Amazing imagery! I have noticed a great deal or truth and emotion in your work. Its dark at times but it is clear the speaker is torn about who they want to be. There is Clear imagery in this piece. the line "like a broken Marionette" I am wondering are you talking to another person in paragraph #5 or is this self reflection because the ""S make it a little difficult to tell the difference. But over all a well written prose.
Wow! What a breathtaking piece of work! There are so much emotion behind this piece! There is wishing to go back to the past AND for a better future; there is remnants of happiness; Pain of what has changed; the fear of uncertainty of moving on. Honestly an amazing poem! Great Work!!!
Every once in a while you come across a short story like this and find its simplicity very refreshing. I love this story. The innocence between William and Cu was especially nice! Excellent job on this. It is a gem!
I LOVE THESE KINDS OF STORIES!This story reminded me of my own Story "Star Wars: Shadows of Scarif" part 2. I love when an enemy becomes an Asset. Something I love about this story is that you don't always know what Stormtroopers are thinking and to have a stormtrooper's feelings shown so clearly is amazing. great Job!!!
You captured Anakin and Yoda Very well. The story was believable, and made me feel like this story fit into the Star Wars Canon. Well done! I would love to see what else happens to Ciara after this story!
I love the concept of this story. It is a fresh spin on literally bringing the Star Wars Universe to our world! The Story was very descriptive and truly gave an idea of what would happen if the Imperial Navy attacked Earth. WELL WRITTEN! KEEP WRITING!
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