Funny that this was listed under romance/love as it contained neither. It was a pointless story. Both people seemed as shallow as a rain puddle. They both had their "passions" which were overridden by their sexual passion. It seemed like the author had a hard time expressing actual lovemaking. Their seemed little of interest.
There was scant detail about anything from the old cars, to the real estate office, to the woman, to how they met, to why they were even together after meeting.
Confusing. The son doesn't wait for an explanation? Does the son interrupt his father with the baseball bat smash or does the father stop mid-sentence to smash the son and think a final thought. Is it Lisa's father that is the son that grandfather of Lisa hopes rots in hell? Is the first person speaking even related to Lisa? Is the person speaking related to the grandfather? After all, "I hope my son rots in hell" as a final thought doesn't necessarily refer to the skull smasher
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