You have very good structure. Despite talking about many different times in your life, sometimes years apart, you maintain very consistent flow. Also, even though these events take up so much time, you give just enough details to drive the story forward, without adding a lot of unnecessary clutter or loose information. I admire that ability and the fact that you speak from personal experience makes this a very important piece while setting a good example to follow in my own future writings. Obviously this piece was interesting to read since i'am a student of psychology, I read through to the end, and am writing a review.
P.S. This is the only article i read in months, since it was in the sponsored column on the right of the screen.
You have very good structure. Despite talking about many different times in your life, sometimes years apart, you maintain very consistent flow. Also, even though these events take up so much time, you give just enough details to drive the story forward, without adding a lot of unnecessary clutter or loose information. I admire that ability and the fact that you speak from personal experience makes this a very important piece while setting a good example to follow in my own future writings. Obviously this piece was interesting to read since i'am a student of psychology, I read through to the end, and am writing a review.
P.S. This is the only article i read in months, since it was in the sponsored column on the right of the screen.
Iam very happy to see
That the length of a story does not always correlate with its value.
Thank you for such a good example of this.
I honestly had no idea what to expect on your page not with that title.
I will definitely definetly keep an eye out for more for stories,
especially short ones like this.
Wow. This is very emotional.
I think just the courage to mention and talk about such a personal topic means you are dealing and overriding the stigma.
As soon as you said "diagnosed me after an hour"
I knew you meant a psychiatrist :)
It just really suck that when I read the tumor was "in the appendix",
I though; great, that's an organ no one's would miss...
Only to hear it gets so much worse and pervasive.
I read about one girl who found a lump and by the time she got a second opinion it had developed into 5, 3 of which were already mals.
The reason this stuck with me though is because I get terribly afraid of anything happening to my digestive track, and the idea of having your bowel removed is just about the 2nd worst thing I can imagine.
Cool, pen names are hand and despite your reasoning Iam glad you included at least some personal details at the end. Were those added on during a later edit, I wonder :) Iam curious where those 4 works of your were published, just for perspective. Well... Regardless this bio does at least offer a good frame for your writing, since knowing about the artist can always offer a better perspective into their works, I hope to see more of yours...
Despite being a tale of love there were some real scenes there which helped this poem visualize by leaps and bounds. Something that many love poems have difficulty with. This could have easily been expanded by another 25-50% and it would have only improved it. But it seems the "short/sweet" approach definitely won out. The end works well but leaves one to wonder why the final words are capitalized. Perhaps if only because love is always more important that what is around it. This is definitely one of my 1st reviews since I have started my portfolio by writing about love. I get the impression that this poem speaks from experience, only then could one illustrate such a wispy concept as love with few concrete objects\locations.
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