I am very pleased by this fine piece of work that was put out! Indeed it was thrilling!!! I find it very awesome to find a person who also writes about a devil =D I too am writing about a devil! only he's five! but pass that I think this story was very thrilling and it suited my interest and captivated me =) I give you A++!!
I found this story very thrilling beyond words! it has made my inner Chuck Norris crap his pants =D It almost reminds me of a game I have called The Suffering! You did very well though! The spelling, punctuation and dialogue was very much on par! I shall read this story again when it is night where I live =D I just love the horror, and you my friend nailed it all the way!! A++!!! and great job! =D
-taps my chin- hmmm ya know out of all my time of reading I never saw dialogue written like this! I think it's very unique! And I'm always of fan of unique things! So A+! But again, honestly, I think you did a very well job =)
Awwww this story was so fun and cute! I'm going to go read this story to my little sister! She'll just love it =) from my view everything was perfect! The spelling was good too =D I think you really did a good job, so I will give you A+!!! Now ta-ta! I shall go email this story to my friend, he'll love it =D
This was written in such a great manner that it did not fail to keep my mine focused on it :3 I think you did very well!! A story that struck me heart in many ways =D Very appealing! Now my great friend please decide for me another story while I re-read this magnificent piece of art =D
You know this was a interesting take on things from what I've been learning so far =D I love it! You never cease to amaze me! Good job once again my friend!
This story is really awesome you know that? The punctuation and detail was right on track =D and the dialog wasn't over ran or under par, it was right on the spot! The plot and depth kept me interested till the end =) I shall review the second one later on today!
Whoa! This is truly amazing! I'm going to show this to my friend, he'll love it =D and I'm defiantly going to check out that book of your's after I get through with my tasks tonight! And sorry but I really don't have any negative comments, because in my eyes everything was crafted nicely! you get a A++ my friend!
1 word, "AWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!" I dunno I just find this story cute for some reason! funny wittle stags :D got love 'em! I love the poetic touch to your story of adventure though, it's something I don't see to often in my parts. Great job though! A+ for you!
See my friend this why I come to your portfolio when wanting to read twisted "what the bloody hell!?" kind of stories >=D Now it's this one that almost reminds me of the Omen in some way, that and The Rite =D I give 100% awesomeness to this story! Now that it is finally dark where I live I shall read another of your horror stories >:D I lurv the dark >:D
AWWW!!!!!!!!!!!! This was like so adorable!!! It so reminds me of my little sister's story she wrote a couple of weeks ago =D just so cute XD I give a A++ to that little girl and to you to who typed it up for her! 5 stars! and tell her I said she did great!
Whoa! this was trippy man! no wonder you got first place, it's "OH MAH GAWD" WORTHY!!! Now when I was reading I found myself thinking of the city Austin, for what reason? hell if I know :D! but I loved it! I also said aloud "got damn!" when knowing Amparo had all of those children! parts of me would be numb XD I think you did a wonderful job on the story though! now if I may *puts on main character's sunglasses from this story* AWWWWYEAAAH!!!
This story reminds me a lot like how I was when I was younger in kindergarten =D only Peter was like a boy named Joshua in my class, but other than that I give you a A+ to able to reach into my heart and bring that inner memory out :D kudos my friend! I shall now go tell this story to my little sister!
As I kept reading I had a "oh my god!" moment! I LOVE the religious concepts in the story, like the pentagram, cross and Lucifer! It's something I add in my stories =D now when reading I do admit I almost shat my pants from some of the horror, but being the Chuck Norris I wish to be I knew I had to be strong! Great Job!
P.S. Extra props on making me blubber like a baby from penetrating fear!
This story is sooooo awesome! It might be short but it speaks a lot! "not after the TV show he’d been waiting for all week was over-- but right this very minute so that his father could cut the dumb grass." part made me laugh XD I can be like that sometime :D
This is truly a poem that makes me remember two little twits I knew in school! The mask of false cuteness! I I relate to this story! good job for bringing out the truth!
Oh I love this story! I shall save you as my favorite author! :D I loved how everything was taken slow and not rushed, and how everything mended =) Man I wish I had a Aunt Fanny! She's one heck of aunt!
jingngbjskgjnsb!!!!!!!! There should be a second chapter!! I have fallen in love with this!
But time to be serious *sighs* something I hate doing O.O *clears my throat* The detail you have put into this is interesting and entertaining. I like how you made me feel all of the emotion from the demon but managed to not make it to overwhelming. Something I love seeing(:D). There was an equal amount of horror and dialog into this (something I love =D) and the actions were taken very well! Good job chap!
Whoaaaaa this story is trippy! I like it! It's twisted and the horror is great! especially the "Children without souls" bit =) I wish it was continued D=
I feel your pain, and if I'm right, to me this poem describes your love for this person but this person has yet to share the specific love you share for him, your letting him go and hope that he will come back in some way.
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